First Draft introduction

You can call your friend abroad no matter what time it is, and you can use any products that were manufactured abroad. Also, you can see dramas or movies from other countries and you can meet foreigners from various countries if you go outside. These are all phenomenons that globalization has created. Globalization has connected and made people communicate each other more easily and flexibly. After the internet has been created, internet has contributed globalization in the Earth a lot because people can be connected on the website more easily than real life. However, we should think about the globalization and internet's contribution to globalization is positive or helpful to the people all around the world. Even though globalization and internet has made better world, internet's contribution to globalization is negative.

1. Attention grabber 

- I attracted the audience by describing these days situation of globalization, like connecting and communicating with each other on the website or using products from other countries. Then, I mention that all phenomenons are caused by globalization. 

2. Explains the topic 

- In the attention grabber, I introduce the globalization and its phenomenons which are the key points

of my essay. Also, I explain the internet's contribution to globalization. 

3. My thesis 

-  My thesis is ' internet's contribution to globalization is negative.' I think it is clear and direct because my thesis is a abstract of what I'm going to say on the essay. At first, my thesis was ' we shouldn't think internet's contribution to globalization positively', but it is a little bit vague so I changed my thesis.