2014년 10월 27일 월요일

Self-evaluation

1) What score do you think you deserve? 

I think I will deserve 1 point. My first draft needs to be refined. I cannot say my confirmation part is enough to deliver my opinions. On the other hand, I wrote full one persuasive essay under a fully understanding of each parts of persuasive essay. 


2) What did you do well?

I did well on research. I tried hard to find sources from reliable and various website. As a result, I researched enough to elaborate my narration and confirmation. Also, the researches were helpful to write a refutation part.


3) What could you have done better?

I should have lengthen the confirmation part and shorten the narration part. The most important part in the essay is confirmation because it delivers what I'm trying to say. However, I focused on the the negative effects of globalization , not the cause of it and why internet is related to the globalization. My research was not enough to elaborate my confirmation. I could have done better if I had focused on right direction.


4) Which part of the classical argument did you use the best?

I think I did best on my narration. I think I found enough information for the research and use the information for my narration. Thus, my narration has enough information to understand the world essay because it includes full background of the topic. 


5) Which part of the classical argument did you use the most poorly?

I could have done better on my confirmation part. I should have found out the causes of negative effects of globalization, but I only found out the phenomenons of globalization. Thus, I regretted a little bit to focus more on the cause and effects of globalization, not just the phenomenons. 

6) What's your strategy to make your second draft better?


First, I should cut out unnecessary information from the narration. I should pick out really needy information and elaborate them. Second, I will focus on how the globalization is related to Internet to intensify my confirmation. I should research more on the causes of globalization and negative effects which are brought by Internet. Third, I need to correct refutation part, Some part of refutation seems illogical, so I need to change them. Plus, I think I need to correct the overall logic in my essay.  I think my second draft will be better after all things that I wrote down. 

2014년 10월 26일 일요일

Research 5


Source:

 
My Topic:
Should we think Internet's contribution to globalization positively?

What I hope to learn from this source: 
I hope I could learn the refutation of my thesis. Also, I hope I could get re-refutation of my thesis. If I could get those information, I would like to do compare those ideas and support my thesis by them.


Notes:
 
<Opposed ideas of my thesis>
1) Pascal Salin He said that globalization brought worldwide connection between people and development of internet and telecommunication techniques. As a result, he insisted that globalization are benefits to people because it brought more advanced standard of living by internet and technologies.
 
2) Ron Manners He claimed that we are in favor of planning globalization for the future. According to his theory, most people think globalization is beneficial for people, and we should respect the notions of majorities about globalization.
 
< Ideas for refutation >
1) James M. Buchanan He metioned about wrong information about improvement in communication. People communicate to gain and not to lose, but globalization can be malevolent to some people and the connections are only applied to high-class people who have money and power.
 
2) Catherine Eschle She explained the anti-globalization phenomenon. Anti-globalization has emerged for the negative effects of globalization. This movement showed that not all people are in favor of globalization and some people are in aware of globalization and the Internet.
 
 

 
 

Final Thoughts: 
 
After the research, I feel like the world and the generations that live in these days are in the transition period. Some people can understand why the globalization can’t solve the problem but sill others only see the one aspect of globalization. I should mention about the common thoughts of people and correct their opinions.
 
 

First Draft

Be aware of globalization and Internet

You can call your friend abroad no matter what time it is, and you can use any products that were manufactured abroad. Also, you can see dramas or movies from other countries and you can meet foreigners from various countries if you go outside. These are all phenomenons that globalization has created. Globalization has connected and made people communicate each other more easily and flexibly. After the internet has been created, internet has contributed globalization in the Earth a lot because people can be connected on the website more easily than real life. However, we should think about the globalization and internet's contribution to globalization is positive or helpful to the people all around the world. Even though globalization and internet has made better world, internet's contribution to globalization is negative.
The definitions of ‘globalization’ are various. However, they have common idea that globalization is the process of interaction and integration in economical, cultural, and financial worldwide within various nations.
Many people think globalization is a recent one, but we can find globalization from thousand years ago. We can say the examples of trades many years ago between the easter countries and western countries. The merchants from both side sold their products to other merchants from different region, and the path named Silk Road connected areas in a distant such as Central Asia, China, and Europe, is the proof of their trades. In fact, the current wave of globalization which everybody knew began after the Second World War. After the war, many governments have adopted free market and open economic systems and policies. The international trades and investments increased between various countries. Many governments removed barriers in commerce and have established international agreements to promote trade in goods, services, and investments. Corporations took advantage of new opportunities in foreign markets and they started built their factories in foreign areas. Also, a huge amount of people immigrated and emmigrated.
Nowadays, Internet, affects a lot to people's lives in various areas. For example, the Internet enable companies to promote productivity through by much faster access of information and electronic transactions. Also, new jobs are created such as IT professionals and engineers. Internet has altered the structure of the mass media : local and national news changed into world wide news. Some negative view thinks Internet has contributed negatively to people's lives because English speakers dominate the media and they have popularized American culture. Whatsoever, Internet is indeed the major advancement in the modern era which make people easily connect, contact, and control other people and world.
All the aspects of Internet can prove that Internet has a signigicance on globalization. Due to the technological development, globalization has been facilitated. Mostly, internet promote faster and easier communication. Internet provides cheaper and faseter method of communication such as fast phone calls in a distance through web, and web cameras, microphones, messengers are all technologies that make people communicate with other people far from them through the Internet. These new types of communication which internet provide has a significant impact of globalization because it connects people all over the world.
Because of the globalization's effects, people think globalization positively. At first, people consider globalization as the greater opportunity for people around the world for economical increased standard of living.  Furthermore, There is a greater access to foreign culture in the form of movies, music, food, clothing, and more. Second, they think globalization brought economical effect. Also, knowledge and technologies exchanged and was shared among countries. Globalization provides the people of the developing countries different kinds of jobs to live their lives and the developed ones a great many benefits.

However, globalization is not always positive. Although positive effects still exist, we should be aware of its negative impacts for the future for ourselves and people all over the world.
First, in economical aspects, globalization bring much bigger gap between the poor and the rich. According to BBC, Globalization operates mostly in the interests of the richest countries, which continue to dominate world trade at the expense of developing countries. This tendency leads governments of developed countries to allow their corporations to build their factories outside of their own countries. However, this phenomenon take away the industrial foundation of their own and opportunities of economical growth. The corporations want to use low wages in foreign countries which increase their profit margins. International corporations build their factories all over the world and exploit labor and take away their development opportunities.This tendency leads to much bigger the gap between the rich and the poor. India can be an example of this phenomenon. At first, people think India has a benefit from globalization, which gained lots of profits from new industries that related to international corporations. However, most average people's lives in India say differently. They say that poverty became more serious than before. One in three Indians live on less than $1 a day and India is still home to the world's largest conglomeration of malnourished people. Also, The latest UN Human Development Report worries the gap between the rich and the poor by economical growth and social progress. A narrow-based and weak foundation of economical become serious problem. Another problem is that inequalities that globalization has failed to remove. Even though a few people may evaluate globalization positively, its effects don't always be good or positive. That's why politicians have latched onto the idea of the disappearing middle class as a political issue, but none of their income redistribution schemes are likely to have any immediate substantial impact. It makes some Anti-globalization campaigners try to draw people's attention to these points by demonstrating against the World Trade Organization. They think the WTO is the cause of free flow of trade around the world.

Another serious problem which is cause by globalization is cultural aspects. Globalization is viewed by many as a threat to the world's cultural diversity. Some people concern about that globalization decrease or remove local economy, tradition and languages by capitalism and the power of developed countries. For instance, a Hollywood film is far more likely to be successful worldwide than one made in India or China, which also have thriving film industries.
All these impacts of globalization are related to the development of information technology. In the core of IT, there is the development of the Internet. Most people can use Internet without any disturbance, however, not all people are able to join the global community made by the Internet. Countries in the developing world are not able to take advantage of the Internet in the same way as developed nations can. There is no universally equal access to Internet all over the world. Some people from countries like North Korea has few opportunities to access Internet because its government censor it. Also, some poor countries have no opportunities to use any IT products. Therefore, disadvantages people and businesses in developing nations who are unable to take advantage of the Internet's global potential.
Some people may disagree with the opinion that Internet has contributed negatively to globalization. For example, some people appreciate globalization because they think globalization has connected the whole world so people are more available to communicate much easier than before due to the Internet. Also, like Pascal Salin insist, globalization brought development of internet and telecommunication techniques. The requirement of more convenient and fast technology of Internet has made more improved technology of Internet. It is true that Internet make the world connected. However, not all people can enjoy the convenience of the connection. People who can not access on the Internet can't experience such convenience, also they , someone who are not economically or politically available,  can't get enough information as much as others. As James Buchanan says that people communicate to gain and not to lose, but globalization can be malevolent to some people. The informational gap between the rich and the poor become much bigger than before and it leads to the economical gap between them. Therefore, the connections between people are only relevant who have power or money. Ron manners claims that most people are in favor of globalization because they think it is beneficial to them so people should listen to the opinions from public and majorities. However, if his thought were true, there wouldn't be any anti-globalization. Recently, according to Catherine Eschle, anti-globalization has emerged for the negative effects of globalization.  As I mentioned before, people who are against to globalization had protests for the anti-WTO. They thought that WTO has promoted free market which has encouraged the richer-get-richer phenomenon. We should think about the people who are damaged by internet development and expanded trades. Also, people who think globalization positively suggest that globalization make people understand different cultures and notions. However, some dominant culture prohibited cultural variety in the world and rather interrupt understanding each other. Therefore, although the benefits of globalization has existed, internet has contributed negatively , so we should be aware of danger from it.
In the future, we will live in a more developed world. People will use advanced technology and will contact people much more conveniently. We can appreciate those improvements because this achievements are from our ancestors and ours efforts. On the other hand. we should think about the danger of the globalization and the contribution of internet to globalization. We should remember how globalization which related to Internet has brought much bigger poverty and frustration to those who can't live in an affluent life. Internet which has brought all the convenient and new world is not always positive to people. Because of the Internet, our own culture, notion and our happiness can be removed from our lives and some other things can dominate. We should not neglect the power of Internet and globalization. We always think the both negative and positive side and live in wise life.


week 10 - conclusion

my conclusion


In the future, we will live in a more developed world. People will use advanced technology and will contact people much more conveniently. We can appreciate those improvements because this achievements are from our ancestors and ours efforts. On the other hand. we should think about the danger of the globalization and the contribution of internet to globalization. We should remember how globalization which related to Internet has brought much bigger poverty and frustration to those who can't live in an affluent life. Internet which has brought all the convenient and new world is not always positive to people. Because of the Internet, our own culture, notion and our happiness can be removed from our lives and some other things can dominate. We should not neglect the power of Internet and globalization. We always think the both negative and positive side and live in wise life.

2014년 10월 25일 토요일

week 9 - refutation and concession

1. What is my thesis?


Even though globalization and internet has made better world, internet's contribution to globalization is negative.


2. What is the opposite position?

Globalization connects people all over the world and brings easier communications by the Internet. 

3. What arguments can I anticipate?
a) Pascal Salin - globalization brought worldwide connection between people and development of internet and telecommunication techniques

b) Ron Manners - We are in favor of planning globalization for the future. 


c) People can understand various culture and their own notions through globalization.

4. How will I counter those arguments?

a) James M. Buchanan - people communicate to gain and not to lose, but globalization can be malevolent to some people and the connections are only applied to high-class people who have money and power.

b ) Catherine Eschle - Anti-globalization has emerged for the negative effects of globalization.

c) Dominance by a few powerful cultures 

My Refutation and Concession

Some people may disagree with the opinion that Internet has contributed negatively to globalization. For example, some people appreciate globalization because they think globalization has connected the whole world so people are more available to communicate much easier than before due to the Internet. Also, like Pascal Salin insist, globalization brought development of internet and telecommunication techniques. The requirement of more convenient and fast technology of Internet has made more improved technology of Internet. It is true that Internet make the world connected. However, not all people can enjoy the convenience of the connection. People who can not access on the Internet can't experience such convenience, also they , someone who are not economically or politically available,  can't get enough information as much as others. As James Buchanan says that people communicate to gain and not to lose, but globalization can be malevolent to some people. The informational gap between the rich and the poor become much bigger than before and it leads to the economical gap between them. Therefore, the connections between people are only relevant who have power or money. Ron manners claims that most people are in favor of globalization because they think it is beneficial to them so people should listen to the opinions from public and majorities. However, if his thought were true, there wouldn't be any anti-globalization. Recently, according to Catherine Eschle, anti-globalization has emerged for the negative effects of globalization.  As I mentioned before, people who are against to globalization had protests for the anti-WTO. They thought that WTO has promoted free market which has encouraged the richer-get-richer phenomenon. We should think about the people who are damaged by internet development and expanded trades. Also, people who think globalization positively suggest that globalization make people understand different cultures and notions. However, some dominant culture prohibited cultural variety in the world and rather interrupt understanding each other. Therefore, although the benefits of globalization has existed, internet has contributed negatively , so we should be aware of danger from it.

2014년 10월 18일 토요일

Research4

 
My Topic:

Should we think Internet's contribution to globalization positively?

What I hope to learn from this source: 
I hope I could learn more about negative effects of globalization. Also, I want to find some evidence that can supports my thesis. Furthermore, I hope I can find the relationship between internet and globalization and internet's effect on globalization. 

Notes:
 <Negative effects of globalization>
① economical aspects
- Globalisation operates mostly in the interests of the richest countries, which continue to dominate world trade at the expense of developing countries.
- Some Anti-globalisation campaigners try to draw people's attention to these points by demonstrating against the World Trade Organisation. They think the WTO is the cause of free flow of trade around the world.
- low wages in foreign countries enable retailers to sell clothing, cars and other goods at reduced rates in Western nations where shopping has become an ingrained part of the culture. This allows companies to increase their profit margins. At the same time, shoppers save money when they buy these goods, causing some supporters of globalization to argue that while sending jobs overseas tends to lower - it also tends to make them more similar to one another. At the market level, linked global financial markets propel local issues into international problems, such as meltdowns in Southeast Asia to Russian debt defaults.
- Globalization enable corporations build their factories outside of their own countries. However, this phenomenon take away the industrial foundation of their own and opportunities of economical growth.
- Politicians have latched onto the idea of the disappearing middle class as a political issue, but none of their income redistribution schemes are likely to have any immediate substantial impact.
 
② cultural aspects
Globalisation is viewed by many as a threat to the world's cultural diversity. : Some people concern about that globalization decrease or remove local economy, trandition and languages by capitalism and the power of developed countries.
ex] a Hollywood film is far more likely to be successful worldwide than one made in India or China, which also have thriving film industries.
 
③ social aspect
- globalization and technology are the factors which contributed to civil society that is based on web community and civic organizations.
- people concern that the strength of civil society make a more fragmentation of our society and a disconnect between people, classes, and races that could grow worse.
- the gap between rich and poor become much larger from the biased economic opportunities and political power
- globalization reflects people from all over the world and their opinions which are conceded between them. However, this is only benefit to entrepreneurs who has economical power.
④ example : India
- At first, people think India has a benefit from globalization, which gained lots of profits from new industries that related to international corporations.
- However, most average people's lives in India say differently : poverty became more serious than before.
ex] One in three Indians live on less than $1 a day and India is still home to the world's largest conglomeration of malnourished people.
- The latest UN Human Development Report worries the gap between the rich and the poor by economical growth and social progress. A narrow-based and weak foundation of economical become serious problem.
- Another problem is that inequalities that globalization has failed to remove.
- Even though a few people may evaluate globalization positively, its effects don't always be good or positive.
 
< How internet make this phenomenon more serious >
Not everyone is able to join the global community. Countries in the developing world are not able to take advantage of the Internet in the same way as developed nations can. There is no universally equal access to Internet all over the world. Some people from countries like North Korea has few opportunities to access Internet because its government censor it. Also, some poor countries have no opportunities to use any IT products. Therefore, disadvantages people and businesses in developing nations who are unable to take advantage of the Internet's global potential.
 

Final Thoughts:
Negative impacts of globalization has a common idea. Although globalization has connected all over the world, it only benefits to high class, which includes people who have money and power. They use globalization for their own, so the gap between the rich and the poor must be intensified. Also, Internet has contributed this phenomenon significantly because not all people can have information so this inequality may cause informational gap which leads to economical gap. After the research, I want to let people know this phenomenon. We should be aware of the negative effects of globalization.